With
midday approaching and her morning chores behind her, Grete had finally found
an opportunity to play. She moved the
chair resting next to her door to the center of the room, retrieved her violin from
the stand beside her bed, and sat down. She positioned her violin between her
chin and shoulder blade, and gently struck the bow against the strings. The melody it produced was soft and slow, and
Grete’s delicate motions matched the pace of the tune. As she played, she tapped her foot in time
with the music and the colors swimming across the inky blackness of her closed
eyelids began to dance and swirl to the harmony that engulfed her room. Suddenly, however, Grete’s concentration was
broken by a knock at the door.
“Who’s there?” shouted Grete.
“It’s Gregor, open up.” With a flustered sigh, Grete put down her violin
and got up to open the door.
“What do you want?” inquired Grete.
“I came to watch you play.” With
glass of milk and sandwich in hand, Gregor attempted to step into the bedroom,
but Grete denied him entry.
“Don’t even think about bringing any
food in here! I just finished cleaning.”
“Come on, can’t your dear brother be
treated to a meal and a concert on the last day before his business trip?”
“Fine, just make sure not to get any
crumbs on the floor.” Grete returned to her chair and readied her violin once
more. Gregor grabbed another spare chair
that sat beside Grete’s bed and placed it front and center before her. Gregor then set his glass of milk on the
floor and began eating his sandwich as Grete started to play.
This piece was performed at a
considerably faster pace than her previous one; it was a wild concerto that had
her digits dancing madly along the fingerboard as her bow struck the chords
with rapid precision.
As she played, Gregor imagined Grete
onstage in front of a packed concert hall, the spotlight shining down on her as
she graced the audience with an immaculate rendition of Vivaldi’s “Spring”. Every gaze in the building would be
transfixed upon her as her violin brought to life images of blooming flowers,
flowing streams, and cloudless skies.
Gregor’s daydream was finally
brought to an end by the completion of his sister’s performance.
“Bravo!” Gregor exclaimed as he stood
up from his chair and clapped enthusiastically.
Grete immediately responded by rolling her eyes, but quickly conceded
and returned Gregor’s standing ovation with an equally enthusiastic bow.
“Satisfied?” Grete questioned glibly.
“Absolutely! That was wonderful!
Now, if you’ll excuse me, I have to go pack.” Gregor gulped down the last of
his milk and made his way towards the door.
“Hey, don’t forget to wake me before
you leave tomorrow, okay?”
“Don’t worry, I wouldn’t leave town
without saying goodbye to my little sister.”
“Than-” Before Grete could finish,
she felt a collection of tiny breadcrumbs prickling the bottom of her foot.
“Gregor, I told you not to make a
mes in here!” Gregor flashed a sly smirk as he fled Grete’s room, shutting the
door behind him.
That was the last time she saw
Gregor smile.
******
Grete remembered when
milk was Gregor’s favorite drink. Now,
it seemed that he had no taste for it at all. The basin of milk and bread she
had left for him had been untouched, and she couldn’t help but wonder why. She was certain that the strain caused by
this ordeal of his would have instilled Gregor with a fierce appetite. But then again, maybe he didn’t even need to
eat. Grete had yet to get a good look at
Gregor since his transformation. What had he become, exactly? Was he some sort
of monster? That couldn’t be, that sort
of thing only happens in books. This was
real life; how could such a thing be possible?
As Grete pondered these questions,
she began to sweep Gregor’s floor.
Whatever Gregor was, she was sure that he’d at least appreciate the fact
that his room was kept tidy.
Then, in the midst of cleaning,
Grete spotted the cloth samples resting on the table. The sight of them made her recall how Gregor
had slowly grown more melancholy since taking the job as a travelling
salesman. He became withdrawn, spending
most of his time isolated in his bedroom.
When he’d come down to dinner, he hardly said a word to anyone and
stared down at his meal, seemingly lost in thought. Grete wondered if the constant travelling had
begun to tax Gregor beyond his limits.
She wondered if he liked anything about his job at all. She wondered how
long it had been since Gregor was happy.
Grete then remembered her
violin. She remembered how her
performances made Gregor smile; how, years ago, he would take the time to watch
her play. But, what if Gregor heard her
play again? Would that snap out of
whatever spell he was under? It seemed like ages since she had performed, and
maybe that was part of the reason why Gregor had slipped into such a sorry
state. Maybe if she played again,
everything would go back to normal. Gregor
would return to his old self, and he’d watch Grete recite sonatas and concertos
while drinking milk and wating sandwiches that left crumbs on her clean
floor. Maybe, once she started playing
again, everything would be alright…
I really enjoyed reading your fan fiction, I also chose to write about Gregor so this was another interesting point of view. I also like how you left us guessing at the end, I was curious to read more.
ReplyDeleteYou handle this very nicely, Nicholas. This is a lovely point of view to assume.
ReplyDeleteI like how you show the relationship between Grete and Gregor not only before the transformation, but before he even became engulfed in his work. It's a nice contrast seeing Gregor so carefree, and I like how you made Grete aware of the way he changed since he started working. The open ending works very nicely here. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you started the story. The piece in the begining was interesting. I cannot remember if Grete played the violin or not, but if she did not it was cool that you set the story up that way. I also like how you incorperated Grete remonicing of the begining of the story. This is one of the best stories I have read from the fan fictions so far.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you did this story, I also did my fan fiction on this story and it was interesting how you did the same story but had a totally different idea and way to do it. I especially like the introduction to your story.
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